Comment on a colleague's work #2

     In her blog, the author Morgan Noack writes about an article titled, “Arizona Sues Federal Government for Failing to Enforce Immigration.” When you click on the hyperlink that takes you to the article, there are two authors present. Morgan Noack did not acknowledge the authors in her blog. It is important to tell the reader who the author, so the reader knows who is writing the article and if they please, go do some research in the author of the article. She begins her article by giving a brief summary of the article. The summary is a little too brief and doesn’t really provide much detail. If the summary were made a little longer and had more information, the reader of the blog would be more informed about what Morgan Noack is writing about. Although her summary is brief, it is also very point on, she tells you what the article is about and how the Governor in the article feels about the situation. She writes “Brewer desperately wants the borders protected once and for all. Brewer also makes an approach to blame the Obama administration for this problem.” After that she goes on to tell the reader of her blog why they should go read the article she is writing about, she says, “I believe that this article is worth reading so that Americans that don’t live in a border state can idealize what those people are dealing with.” In the article that she is writing about the main issue at hand in immigration, it would have been a better overall post if she decided to tell her readers about how she felt on the issue. Although assumptions can be made on the style of her writing, no obvious statement is made by Morgan Noack.

     Mogan Noack’s post was short and to the point. She should elaborate more in the summary and in the details. She should also give her own view on the subject at hand because after all it is her own blog. Overall the post was good but with some improvements and the addition of her own opinions can make it great. You can read her post at: http://mnoackusgovt.blogspot.com/2011/02/article-pick.html